Generation gap is never painful without communication gap
Back when I was twenty-three
young, naive, happy, carefree
I fantasized once
having two cute sons
I hoped- to be a good parent;
to know the reasons for their choice;
to run a mile in their shoes,
before ever raising my voice
To feel the shoe bites they had
before I acted
To understand their sides
before I reacted
Alas, no matter how much I tried
no matter how many times I wore
Those shoes of a kid
now fit me no more
As I neared my forties
I couldn’t relate to the kids’ part
the pieces never fit
instead kept falling apart
I saw our bond burn down in flames
as generation gap grew from its smoke
trying to be in their shoes
soon just felt like a joke
Until one day when they cried
with aching pain, I recall they said
“Mom, you never even tried!
look where your parenting led”
It was then that reality hit me hard
generation gap was just an excuse
communication gap was the main reason
that made me outgrow their shoes
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ReplyDeleteHi Palavi
ReplyDeleteYou have done one wonderful job again.
I don't remember the last time I read something as good as your poems.
I liked the way you have constructed the poem. In my opinion you should have ended it in a way like the poem " Cold within " ended like for example " Then they moved apart not due to the generation gap but due to the communication gap" smth like that or idk Afterall you are the "architect/author/poet" as acc to me it would have created more impact. I would also like to suggest one more thing that if you added a reference of todays digital world like " in current times the whole world cared about SOCIAL NETWORKING but everyone ignored the networking btw parents and their children". It would be an amazing reference to the iconic movie "social networking " . Sorry if i gave too many suggestions, they may not be nice but i feel it would make it more interesting but i have absolutely loved your work. i am looking forward for all future creations and good luck for the future and once again you really did a splendid job :)
Hey! Thank you so much for taking the time to read my work and leave suggestions! Really appreciate it :) will consider your points for sure!
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